ext_17967 ([identity profile] corrielle.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] oneiriad 2005-06-04 11:32 am (UTC)

Trying not to cry now...

This was just heartbreakingly sad, but I applaud you for dealing with a harsh reality that I've seen little of in fanfic. My heart did an odd little jump when I read the line about Jack standing in front of the mirror, and I knew things were not going to end well.

I like how you managed to trace the development of their relationship so well in just a few short sentences, and I like Jack doing the honorable thing even though it meant removing himself from the vicinity of the one he loved.

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